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          Executive Summary
         
          What I learned... 
         
          Most importantly, I learned that in many strong hypertext
         fictions the structure illuminates / relates to /
         recapitulates the plot or content. Deena said recently, "The
         structure is the plot." I am being more tentative: there may
         be strong hypertext fictions in which the structure is not
         crucial; it's just that I haven't seen them (or no one has
         written them). Attention to structure was exactly what was
         missing from the piece I submitted. The workshop was an
         encouragement to take the exploration of structure as far as
         it could possibly go. 
         
          My experience with the works presented was that when
         writers simply let each chunk be the size it naturally
         wanted to be, reading the chunks felt more lifelike than
         reading a linear narrative. The same is true for writing
         chunks of hypertext - it feels more "natural" to me -
         although other participants pointed out that it takes "about
         nine times as long." I found it bracing to have a mix of
         folks trained in literary criticism with other folks who
         learned by the seat of their links. The more experienced
         writers (another way to slice the workshop) expressed the
         same excitement that I feel in working with HT nonfiction, a
         sense of working without limits, before the "mores" become
         established to hem us in. (Quick!) Mark Bernstein sat in,
         and I was also impressed how many of those present
         acknowledged the support / inspiration / teaching of Rob
         Kendall. We talked about "conjuring the reader," a topic
         upon which Bill Bly plans to expand in the future. My
         contribution was a joke, "When the hypertext is ready, the
         reader appears." Bill said that in his experience this is
         not a joke. I am interested in learning more about what he
         means.
         
            My thoughts on the question posed in my forepaper:
         "...could we get good results by presenting outrageous form
         & content *via* some expected mechanisms, with reader
         control?" I am more confident than ever that this is the way
         I want to go personally, and that studies of "flow states"
         (with video games) have some applicability to hypertext
         fiction. However, it became clear that the majority of
         workshop participants believed that as of that date, reader
         expectations were NOT yet jelled enough for me to be able to
         "use" them...that the frontier was still quite open..and in
         the work of writers such as Markku Eskelinen (upon which
         I'll comment in detail after my Finnish improves) I also saw
         the benefits to be gained from violating or confounding
         readers' expectations...or perhaps one could say, "making
         the readers work." [This is my bareknuckled restatement of
         Espen Aarseth's neologism ergodic literature - "...a term
         appropriated from physics that derives from the Greek words
         ergon and hodos, meaning 'work' and 'path.' In ergodic
         literature, nontrivial effort is required to allow the
         reader to traverse the text." Quotation from Aarseth's
         Cybertext, Johns Hopkins, 1997.]
         
              
         
            What I brought...
         
            Instead of presenting my work, I used my workshop
         slot to present a short introduction to the kind of "reader
         watching" that I've been doing in my usability lab (at
         Trellix Corporation and elsewhere). Then we did a "fishbowl"
         in which we watched a brave reader, both listening to verbal
         feedback and watching the reader's actions and work with
         navigation. Below I've placed excerpts from the materials I
         handed out. Anyone who wants to learn more about d be happy
         to explain more about this and we could do some live
         reviewing together (fishbowl practice, etc.). I could
         explain the basic protocols (=> don't gasp, the reader is
         always right...).
         
          I've found that readers like to have their efforts
         rewarded in some way - and they like to feel potent and free
         - they like to feel that the text is their oyster. (We may
         or may not want them to feel that way, but that's what they
         want.)
         
          No matter how a text (or system) works, readers will make
         their own utterly amazing mental models of how it works, and
         act according to them. We humans are obsessed with
         discerning meaning in chaos, online and elsewhere, and tend
         to discern it whether it's there or not.
         
          Reviewers are often too polite. Don't listen to what they
         say: watch what they do. Performance-based tests are the
         kind I prefer.
         
           Reviewers are not writer/designers. A usability review
         is excellent for finding where problems lie, but then the
         problems have to be turned back to the writer for solution
         (or at least another crack at it). A common occurrence: four
         readers come to grief at the same point. Each one has a
         different explanation of why, and a different recommendation
         for how to remedy the problem. Those can be reported to the
         writer if there is interest, but the most important thing to
         report is "four readers all crashed at node X," and it's up
         to the writer to take it from there.
         
          Hypertext Fiction Real-Time Review
 Administrator's Page
         
            Selection of good reviewers is the #1 factor in a
         useful test.
         
            Best practice is to obtain everyone's permission
         in advance for any type of recording. When getting
         permission, explain the purpose of the review and how the
         results will be used. (Proposed language below.)
         
            The pre-review "chat" can cover the following:
         
            We are [or: the author is] incredibly grateful for
         your time. You will be providing a valuable kind of feedback
         that will help make the work a more [intense, wonderful,
         your adjective here...] experience for future readers.
         
            In everything you are about to experience, there
         is no right answer. Whatever you think is right. [People who
         have been over-conditioned by some types of schooling will
         not believe this and will try to "trick" the right answer
         out of you anyway.]
         
            I'm going to sit with you during the review, and I
         might suggest areas to explore. However, I'm not usually
         able to answer questions about the text. This is not to be
         cold-hearted, but because because what's important is what
         you think, where you are looking for the next part of the
         [story or other noun here].
         
            Don't worry if the web site [or program] crashes.
         We'll just start over. [Or: we have plenty of electrons. Or
         a joke of your choice]
         
            As you read, please "think out loud" - tell us
         what's going through your mind. At some points we may ask
         you to "surf" a bit more slowly than you would normally, so
         we can talk about your reading choices. For example, when
         you're about to click on a link, just hover over it with the
         mouse and we'll talk briefly before you click and also
         briefly afterwards. The questions will always be the same:
         
            (before)
         
          
            Why are you clicking?
            
             What do you think this link will give you?
           
         
            (after)
         
          
             Is this what you expected? Why or why not?
            
             (NEW & optional) After clicking this link,
            do you feel closer, or farther, from "closure" within
            this piece?
          [page given to Reviewer]
         
          Thank you in advance for providing feedback on [this
         text]!
         
          Agenda
         
          Pre-Questionnaire
         
          [describe rough steps they'll experience]
         
 Post-Questionnaire
 Before we begin, do you have any questions?
         
          [Normally each "task" is on a separate page. Can
         introduce tasks as follows.]
         
          1. Start [from a given point]. Please explore from this
         point, reading as you usually read hypertext, but thinking
         out loud to explain your reactions to the text and your
         reading choices within it.
         
          When you feel you have read enough, say, "I'm done."
         
          [and so on]
         
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